Jasmine Hart

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you're enjoying it. :) Personally I think that the philosophical nature of this makes it read more like a journal entry than a poem-which ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! This is an interesting piece and I like your use of rhyming couplets. I'd add more punctuation. It can help if you read your poems aloud ...

Hi, This flows nicely and is interesting. It reminds me of "The Picture Of Dorian Gray" (which is a great book!). I'd cut the repetition because I think that the ...

Hi Kat, Welcome to Yws! First I'm going to look at what you have here and then I'll go on to tips for a possible rewrite. The first thing that ...

Mary "Oh fine! If I must! But the minute I get cold, I'm turning back. I'll meet you downstairs." I returned to my room to get a shawl, and put ...

14567...about 6000 words behind where i want to be but if I do 2000 words every day for the rest of the month with two days off I should make ...

Sorry dudes, I sort of forgot about this!Thanks summer. Yes, that's fine chupa. Mary Bertha's quarters were freezing. I was shivering by the time I left her with her next ...

10344 June, are you serious? That's amazing! Fair play!

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6514. Yesterday I was 131 words short of what I wanted to do so it's 2131 today...

4645 Maybe try typing Lorril.Set youself a time to write and then go write.

Yes! I totallt forgot! I have no plot and no characters and no setting...

Mary Ellen Bertha John Emily Nice. So want to start tommorow then? :)

Yes, that would be great, just please don't start on the actual story until all the characters are gone. I'd like to be Mary if that's ok Phantom, but would ...

Plot It's 1880, London. Mary and Ellen Woode are two sisters from a wealthy family. Mary has had three proposals since she turned sixteen two years ago, and turned each ...